Would anyone care...

... to look at a Chapter-in-Progress of The Hellion Prince, complete with missing scenes, uncertain chronology, and swathes of parenthetical notes?  I'm rather stuck on some nonfunctioning pieces of Chapter Thirteen, and not certain how to make it work, and not sure how to convey some things that are boring to Damarhis without also boring my audience.  There are no major plot spoilers in the text, as Thirteen is a pretty uneventful chapter (at least so far), but a few musings on history and politics, and a couple of conversations (as well as some parenthetical notes saying CONVERSATION GOES HERE.  WHAT THE HELL DO THEY TALK ABOUT?)

Familiarity with the text is probably a necessary quality in my volunteers, but I'd be willing to show it to interested parties regardless, just to see.


Much more tempting to work on a certain extra-canonical scene some of you are aware of, but alas, that is unlikely to prove constructive.